by Stephen Nelson
I read the novel and jot down some details in each chapter about characters, location or something I think will be referred back to later in the novel.
I write down sentences that don’t make sense to me.
Some examples are:
He walked upstairs, put on his suit, showered and shaved.
To me, the sentence is not logical.
The way it’s written, he showered when he was wearing his suit. So… he’s wearing a soaking wet suit. Unless that’s the point, the word order should be changed.
Johnny printed his name in blue ink on the black puck.
The idea of printing his name on the puck so he wouldn’t lose it is perfect, but it’s not logical.
Blue ink can’t be seen clearly on a black object. I recommended the authour amend the colour of the ink to neon green.
© Stephen Nelson 2020